My friend is curious about my elder sister’s appearance because I often speak of her. After thinking twice, I decided to answer my friend’s question. My elder sister has long, curly blond hair because she has dyed her hair recently. She is short height, slender and about nineteen years old. When she smiles, she has dimple. In addition, she always wears the contact lenses. Therefore, when you see her, she has big blue eyes. She is often shy when she talks to strangers. According to above description, my friend can know my elder sister and I are very different.
She is short height,
回覆刪除我覺得寫＂she is short,＂不就好了嗎？
When she smiles, she has dimple.
要在＂dimple＂前面加＂a＂，
亦或＂dimple＂本身加＂s＂。
請作者斟酌。
Therefore, when you see her,...
這裡我覺得把＂you＂換成
＂people＂會比較好。
因為文中已經提到朋友、自己…，
之後突然跑出一個＂you＂，感覺有點唐突。
（此點純屬個人意見。）
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
She is short height 這句文法不太對哦
回覆刪除還有she always wears the contact lenses應該加the
=)
She is short height 有點怪
回覆刪除1.My friend is curious about my elder sister’s appearance because I often speak of her.
回覆刪除→My friend is curious about my elder sister’s appearance because I often talk about her.
2.She is short height, slender and about nineteen years old.
→She is short, slender and about nineteen years old.
3.When she smiles, she has dimple.
→When she smiles, she has dimples.
4.According to above description, my friend can know my elder sister and I are very different.
→According to the descriptions above, my friend can know I am very different from my elder sister.
(以上，淺見…)
唷呼唷呼comment時間到囉^_^
回覆刪除數小好有創意>_<
我都想不到有這種方法XD
(我是指向朋友描述姐姐的這個方法)
那妳朋友應該會很想認識妳姐姐XD
回覆刪除我很確定
回覆刪除我有回過這篇
但
誰來告訴我
他為什麼不見了???