I like to eat a lot of food, especially chocolate. First of all, chocolate is cheap and smells good. Sure enough, it tastes sweet and delicious. Second, eating chocolate makes me happy. Hence, when I feel unhappy or furious, I usually buy chocolate and eat it. Third, according to the research, eating chocolate may also make us smarter because chocolate contained several stimulates that increase mental alertness. Eventually, I heard that people eating more cocoa have lower blood pressure than the others. Consequently, it is beneficial for me to eat moderate chocolate. Due to these reasons, I like chocolate very much.
Eventually, I heard that ... than the others.
回覆刪除＂the＂應該可以去掉吧。
Consequently, it is...to eat moderate chocolate.
＂moderate＂和＂chocolate＂中間，
提議加入＂amounts of＂。
巧克力，超喜歡。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
Eventually, I heard that people eating more cocoa have lower blood pressure than the others.
回覆刪除後面的the others應該不用the
stimulate應該是動詞吧?
回覆刪除還是他有名詞用法?
名詞應該是stimulation
because chocolate contained several stimulates
回覆刪除→contained應該是contains，然後stimulate是動詞哦than the others應該不用the
其他都不錯~
Third, according to the research, eating chocolate may also make us smarter because chocolate contained several stimulates that increase mental alertness.
回覆刪除這句的stimulates要改成stimulation哦
我也很愛巧克力YA
chocolate contained several stimulates that increase mental alertness.
回覆刪除裡的stimulates 是...N?
以上~
辛苦了!
我也愛吃~~~~
((眼睛放大+閃亮亮
than the others
回覆刪除改成than others會不會比較好?
其他沒什麼錯誤欸
1.Third, according to ... chocolate contained several stimulates that increase mental alertness.
回覆刪除→Third, according to ... chocolate contained some stimulation that increases mental alertness.
2.Eventually, I heard that people eating more cocoa have lower blood pressure than the others.
→Eventually, I heard that people eating more cocoa have lower blood pressure than others.
3.Consequently, it is beneficial for me to eat moderate chocolate.
→Consequently, it is beneficial for me to eat chocolate moderately.
(以上，淺見…)
大家都說完了!!!!
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