I enjoy playing basketball and volleyball. When it is a PE class, I often play one of them. After thinking their common points, I found both basketball and volleyball need teamwork. Therefore, when I play one of them, I can promote the relation between my friends. Moreover, playing basketball has to divide into two groups. Similarly, playing volleyball has to divide into two groups. In addition, if I don’t warm up, it is easy for me to cause sports injury. Regardless of basketball or volleyball, playing both of them are benefit to me.
應該沒問題 ^^
回覆刪除沒有錯喔(笑
回覆刪除棒喔
回覆刪除1.When it is a PE class, I often play one of them.
回覆刪除→When it comes to the PE class, I often bask myself in one of them.
2.I can promote the relation between my friends.
→I can promote the relationship with my friends.
(沒有其他特別明顯的錯誤，不過我覺得可以代換調一些重複的句子…)
(以上，淺見…)
Moreover, playing basketball has to divide into two groups. Similarly, playing volleyball has to divide into two groups. 在下想改這樣：
回覆刪除＂When playing basketball, people are divided into two groups.＂下句同。
Regardless of... playing both of them are benefit to me.
我會想寫＂...are beneficial to me.＂。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
時態有不一致的地方
回覆刪除playing basketball has to divide into two groups我覺得這樣寫好像怪怪的
棒^^
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