2011年5月25日 星期三

Expressing an Opinion - 1

Using the death penalty as a form of criminal punishment brings a lot of different opinions. Despite the fact that the death penalty is cruel, I feel this punishment is necessary. I am on the same page as those who support the death penalty. For example, if we repeal the death penalty, the criminal rate may increase. Because they don’t worry that they will die and they can eat free meals in prison. In addition, using the death penalty can warn those who will commit the crime. When they intend to kill person, maybe they are afraid of death and give up this plan. Most importantly, those murderers take people’s life and don’t have any regret. In contrast, we have rights to take his life to avoid him to murder more people. Taking into account all of these points, it should be clear that using the death penalty certainly exists.

6 則留言:

  1. In contrast, we have rights to take his life to avoid him to murder more people.
    這邊是不是要用their life和avoid them啊?
    因為前面是those murders

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  2. we have rights to take his life to avoid him to murder more people.
    裡的his 我會寫his or her
    因為不會只有男生會犯罪嘛
    還有avoid後面我會用ING
    "avoid murdering~"

    以上~
    幫妳+1
    XD

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  3. In addition,...those who will commit the crime.
    在下想寫:"...those who want to commit crimes."

    When they ..., maybe they are afraid of death ... 個人偏好:
    "..., perhaps they will be afraid of death..."

    Most importantly, those...
    不確定是"Most important"或"Most importantly"。
    應該是前者。

    In contrast...to avoid him to murder more people.
    我會改:
    "Therefore,...to avoid him murdering more..."


    如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。

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  4. 除了有些不通順,其他沒什麼大錯誤。
    (以上,淺見…)

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  5. In addition, using the death penalty can warn those who will commit the crime.
    crime應該不只有一個,也沒有限定
    the crime改成crimes會比較好:D

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