Stanley Manufacturing opened a large factory in Action last month, and it had some positive effects for local people. For one thing, people who live there can get more jobs. The problem of unemployment would decrease. Additionally, the economy would be more prosperous. Therefore, the population becomes more and more. Eventually, the old and the child must not worry that the adult would leave hometown to find a job. They can gather every day. According to these effects, building a large factory in Action doesn’t necessarily cause negative effects.
是Acton
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用children和adults會比較好吧!
Therefore, the population becomes more and more.
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would become...
gather後面加個together會更好:D
數小也打Action~ 傳染病嗎xd
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and it had some positive effects for local people.
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以上~
我喜歡你的最後一點
XDD數小跟宜珍一樣都打成in Action
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the old and the child
怪怪的耶
改成the elders and the children會不會好一點?
must not worry that the adult
的that改成about感覺會比較適合耶
其他就沒有了(笑
Therefore, the population becomes more and more.
回覆刪除在下欲改＂the population becomes more diverse.＂
Eventually, the old and the child must not worry that ...
＂must not＂似乎表示強烈的禁止；提議＂need not＂。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
it had some positive effects for "the" local people.
回覆刪除The "problems" of unemployment would decrease
They can gather "together" every day只是覺得這樣比較順XP
淺見........
1.Stanley Manufacturing opened a large factory in Action last month, and it had some positive effects for local people.
回覆刪除﹡Acton ﹡local people我想加the…
2.The problem of unemployment would decrease.
﹡前面想加Thus
3.Eventually, the old and the child must not worry that...
﹡child→children ﹡worry後面是否要+about？
4.They can gather every day.
﹡前面想+Also
﹡結論句蠻特別的。
以上，淺見…
must not worry that the adult would leave hometown改成don't have to worry about that adults~
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