This area has a huge increase in population over the past one hundred and fifty years. According to the following reasons, we can know what causes of the population increase. First of all, we advanced in medicine and health care, so people’s life spans are longer and longer. Another reason we improve farming methods that produce more and better food. Thus, we don’t have to worry about hunger. Most importantly, there are fewer infant deaths and more people living longer. This reason results in birth rate is more than mortality. After I bring these reasons, we can know why the population of this area increases rapidly.
we can know what causes of the population increase不用of吧
回覆刪除we advanced in medicine and health care要不要改we have advanced呢?
what causes of the population increase
回覆刪除不用of吧
Another reason we improve farming methods that produce more and better food.
我會改成Another reason was that we improve farming methods that produce more and better food.
1.According to the following reasons, we can know what causes of the population increase.
回覆刪除﹡of應該可以拿掉。
2.This reason results in birth rate is more than mortality.
→This reason results in birth rate's more than mortality.(不確定是不是這麼改，但是妳原本的寫法好像不太對。)
﹡以上，淺見…
According to...what causes of the population increase. ＂of＂可以刪去。
回覆刪除Another reason we improve farming methods that produce more and better food. 在下想稍作修改：
＂Another reason is that we improve farming methods and produce more and better food.＂
This reason results in birth rate is more than mortality. 在下提議二句，參考如下：
＂This reason results in that birth rate is more than the death rate.＂
＂This reason results in that fertility is more than mortality.＂
（相對之名詞，還請閣下斟酌）
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
we "have" advanced in medicine and health care, so people’s life spans are longer and longer.這樣可以嗎??呵呵......
回覆刪除we can know what causes of the population increase.
回覆刪除好像怪怪的...
應該就沒了=]
According to the following reasons, we can know what causes of the population increase.
回覆刪除causes後面不用加of吧:D